The chocolate drama - Fixed version!

Kia ora! This is a writing task I did with my teacher Mr Hughes! I had to pick a piece of writing then I got to put more detail in it. Mr Hughes told us (me and a few other students) 3 types writing things. I don't exactly remember so I might be wrong. 1 was a compound word, 2 was verbs and 3 was nouns. I hope you enjoy my writing task! and feel free to comment on my blog!
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                               Here is my writing before.

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           Here is my writing when I made a few changes
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       Here are some words you can use to make your writing better!

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